RHH: Give me some feedback on these lyrics……?
Question by Truly Fantastic!!!: RHH: Give me some feedback on these lyrics……?
Rate comment, and do you think it should be one whole story or separate verses.
I heard he was the talk of the town, so I came around
to listen to his lyrics, and envision his sound
Vocals were astonishing, a breath of fresh oxygen
watching him in the hood the crowds stood acknowledging
In amazement, he was the poet of the pavement
With a brave wit, if Hip-Hop is dead, he can save it
Voice is music when it’s heard, the prophet of the streets
Absurd treats of word, like Easter sweets, lofted over beats
A resurrection, through every section it was heaven sent
In the next election, I nominate him for the president
Like Eric B, and to see him was like to view Rakim
They said he’s next coming, that’s what I feel I heard them humming
And dude was pretty real; I think they’re for real on to something
Talking about he was great, had more than few blocks rocking
Even with a bad state, you’d never catch rate of his stock dropping
Plus he stayed true to himself, drew attention with massive skill
and, his soul he would never sell to get mass appeal……
Studio time was driving things closer to a record deal
Every time he blessed the mic, he gave the right type of feel
A rappers delight, took flight to a newer height
A truer light and only a few could view the future sight
Or had an idea about what was destine to be
He tested at a degree that had yet to be let free
Still a teen but his style was rather clean
And behind the scene, he was just a guy with a dream
But without a team, he chose to go alone for real
Got a call on his phone it was known he has shown his skill
A big company they said they liked his vibe as whole
Gave him a paper with a line for him to sign his soul
The fine print was not shown, he had yet to dance wit the devil
To him the industry wasn’t know, far advanced pass his level
His crystal ball now got rearranged his destiny in all changed
But in his mind at the time he didn’t now what he was
About to sign with that dotted line
He got out his pen would he seal the massive deal
Would he really sell his soul to get mass appeal?….
He got his lime light and the fame his name came quick
He was still a hit, still legit all in all it was the same shyt
Did a couple shows, ready to drop his first LP
Steady with the flows and his stock was wealthy
He had his spot locked, and the people was still looking
Till the industry started talking and it wasn’t what he had cooking
They said the people don’t want to hear intellect prevail
This isn’t ’94 lyrics with knowledge doesn’t sell
Half of the viewers aren’t in college, the rest could care less, what your saying
Fuck facts they just want hot club track and beats playing
He started to argue, this is my music
I choose it, I’ll never lose it, I own my sound, so don’t abuse it
Try and use it, to make money and profit
This shit ain’t even funny so stop it
I’m not hear to be played and slayed, to get you paid or changed
Music is to be made, I will not be enslaved and chained
They then turned to each other and said do you want your massive deal
Showed him the contract as a whole and his soul he passed for real
The man said we now own your goals, to us your ass is sealed
I guess he would sell his soul to get mass appeal…………..
Best answer:
Answer by janu4242
Good stuff yet again.
I think it’s best to split them up, that would be a ton of stuff to put as one verse…
Like you can split them up but you don’t need like a chorus as a hook, it could just be like scratching and stuff. Like I envision Premo producing it and scratching Mass Appeal by Gangstarr as the hook, as a short break from the lyrics.
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